Sunday 5 June 2011

Would you please tell me what you think of this poem I wrote?

The Door


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You reside within these walls


for you know this place is sane.


A fair amount of pleasure,


A fair amount of pain.


They say this room is %26#039;normal%26#039;.


With that you satisfy.


Why would you want to change?


...you have a hidden a %26quot;why?%26quot;....


A constant touch is present.


A wonder if there%26#039;s more...


You%26#039;re reminded and caressed


by an ever locked door.


But today something has changed!


Have you found the forbidden key?


Will you open up the door?


Are you scarred of what you%26#039;ll see?


The words that they have taught you


scar and stain your mind...


But the door is only for you,


You%26#039;re whatever is behind!


You wipe the perspiration


and tremors from your hands.


%26quot;Turn the key inside the lock!%26quot;


-Curiosity commands.


You swing the door wide open


it%26#039;s time for you to see!


Everything you are


when you posses the perfect key.|||I love it!(:|||I love the poem





It builds throughout right up to the end.





You spelt scared with two r%26#039;s was that to tie in with the word scar two lines later?





2nd to last line put in; Everything that you are.





Keep writing!